Gazing around I take in the surroundings of the boat, the same party boat my friends and I were on last night. We were out celebrating my 21st birthday, and celebrate we did; although the plan had been to wake up in my bed, not on this moving boat.
I reach up and rub my throbbing temples. “How much did I drink last night,” I wonder out loud.
It is then I notice the owner of the boat grinning at me. I forget about the throbbing temples as my heart begins to race in fear.
**just so you know, everything I write is fiction ... strongly influenced from years of Law & Order and John Grishman books...**
oh stink, This is a bit scarry and so real world possibel...I think we need to start a Saturday Centus - Expanded version - where we all expand the story and link up a month later!!!
ReplyDeleteOh no, what are you doing still on the boat?? Very suspenseful. I liked it. Great post.
ReplyDeleteGreat post! I love suspenseful endings.
ReplyDeleteHitch hiking, on land or sea, will do that to you. What happens next?
ReplyDeleteWell done! Great use of the prompt this week! Great cliffhanger!
ReplyDeleteOh my - wonder where you ended up!!!
ReplyDeleteOh er! Need the next bit here! I know how that head feels though!
ReplyDeleteChristy this is the first one I've read this week that literally gave me chills. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteOoo, evil boat owner... very cool take on this one!
ReplyDeleteI have no idea where my previous comment went - another mystery! Really well done, I like your twist on the prompt. And I want to know how she escapes! Kathy
ReplyDeleteUh oh...party night gone wrong...very cool...suspenseful...Peace and blessings
ReplyDeletegreat writing..
ReplyDeleteI tagged you if you want to play along..
http://keepingupwiththeschultzfamily.blogspot.com/2010/05/just-3.html
Wow, I totally thought that was real at first. Good writing I could totally see the scene you created. Stopping by from UBP http://postpartumillness.com/
ReplyDeleteOh, how horridly delicious! I'm thinking she got slipped something in one of her (many) drinks...Very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteWells done1
ReplyDeleteSounds like something I would have done in another life (o:
ReplyDeleteI love your take on this one too...
Great job x
ReplyDeleteUh oh! I suspect there might have been some inappropriate activity the night before. What kind of a grin was it anyway?
ReplyDeleteGreat story.