Saturday, May 22, 2010

The Day After

I look back over my shoulder, squinting into the late afternoon sun, gawking with stunned alarm at the broad rolling muddy waters of the Mississippi.  “Why are we moving?” I think to myself.  


Gazing around I take in the surroundings of the boat, the same party boat my friends and I were on last night.  We were out celebrating my 21st birthday, and celebrate we did; although the plan had been to wake up in my bed, not on this moving boat.  


I reach up and rub my throbbing temples.  “How much did I drink last night,” I wonder out loud. 


It is then I notice the owner of the boat grinning at me.  I forget about the throbbing temples as my heart begins to race in fear.



Jenny Matlock

**just so you know, everything I write is fiction ... strongly influenced from years of Law & Order and John Grishman books...**

19 comments:

  1. oh stink, This is a bit scarry and so real world possibel...I think we need to start a Saturday Centus - Expanded version - where we all expand the story and link up a month later!!!

    ReplyDelete
  2. No exceptions this week, I want more from them all!

    Love your deep dark mystery!

    ReplyDelete
  3. Oh no, what are you doing still on the boat?? Very suspenseful. I liked it. Great post.

    ReplyDelete
  4. Great post! I love suspenseful endings.

    ReplyDelete
  5. Hitch hiking, on land or sea, will do that to you. What happens next?

    ReplyDelete
  6. Well done! Great use of the prompt this week! Great cliffhanger!

    ReplyDelete
  7. Oh my - wonder where you ended up!!!

    ReplyDelete
  8. Oh er! Need the next bit here! I know how that head feels though!

    ReplyDelete
  9. Christy this is the first one I've read this week that literally gave me chills. Bravo!

    ReplyDelete
  10. Ooo, evil boat owner... very cool take on this one!

    ReplyDelete
  11. I have no idea where my previous comment went - another mystery! Really well done, I like your twist on the prompt. And I want to know how she escapes! Kathy

    ReplyDelete
  12. Uh oh...party night gone wrong...very cool...suspenseful...Peace and blessings

    ReplyDelete
  13. great writing..

    I tagged you if you want to play along..

    http://keepingupwiththeschultzfamily.blogspot.com/2010/05/just-3.html

    ReplyDelete
  14. Wow, I totally thought that was real at first. Good writing I could totally see the scene you created. Stopping by from UBP http://postpartumillness.com/

    ReplyDelete
  15. Oh, how horridly delicious! I'm thinking she got slipped something in one of her (many) drinks...Very nicely done.

    ReplyDelete
  16. Sounds like something I would have done in another life (o:
    I love your take on this one too...

    ReplyDelete
  17. Uh oh! I suspect there might have been some inappropriate activity the night before. What kind of a grin was it anyway?

    Great story.

    ReplyDelete

 
Find More Free Custom Color Layouts at April Showers